Here's my contribution to:
Five Sentence Fiction
A second pillow beneath her graying hair allowed some
elevation for Dorothy while still drawing her eyes upward to what would be her
last view.
A catalogue of her life ran across her mind: scenes of
childhood, of passion, of motherhood, of life.
She reviewed the sting of her father’s hand across her face,
the young ecstasy of a summer evening’s ride in a fast convertible, the ache of
lovers’ separation, the miracle of her newborn’s finger, the anguish at the
loss of that child.
Her eyes followed the left branch above her head in the same
way she determinedly turned her thoughts to the path holding only recollections
of joy, and Dorothy smiled as her eyes closed for one last time.
Quite a sad poignant tale of a woman, dying in her bed at a hospice, who's spending fleeting moments of her life peacefully remembering the HIGH and low points of her life.
ReplyDeleteWELL DONE !!!.
This sort of imagery is beyond me. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSo realistic. I did not think that it was possible to write in such few sentences.
ReplyDeleteIt's a good brain exercise anyway, a nice change from crosswords.
DeleteHow touching. I could never do this. Have you written a book?
ReplyDeleteHi Ms. Penny! Yep, it's currently languishing with an agent who has yet to decide if she wants to deal with it.
DeleteA very emotive piece, capturing memories of a life well lived. x
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Truly exquisite!
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