Thursday, September 26, 2013

A Cautionary Tale

This week's topic for Five Sentence Fiction is:

Magnetic


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Beverly scratched her stomach and looked down as she stood on the scales in her pajamas; not the number she had been hoping for.

She stepped off and shuffled into the kitchen to start the coffee machine but before she could reach the counter she felt a pull to the other side of the room where the big white refrigerator sat.

She stood there, bemused, but as long as she was there, reached inside for the remains of last night’s tiramisu.


Turning back to the counter, sticky dessert plate in hand, she was oblivious to the souvenirs from past trips that were arranged on the appliance -  tiny ceramic lemons from Sorrento, a scene from Mount Vernon, the logo of the Boston Red Sox, and many others.

They had gathered to form a ring of magnetism, a ring that not only held them to the refrigerator, but had also drawn her to it as well.  

10 comments:

  1. Ah, the refrigerator "magnet". I know it well.
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/09/26/fsf-five-sentence-fiction-magnetic-attraction-humorous-pg13/

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  2. That's a great idea, I love the idea of a story in only 5 sentences...you wrote this one beautifully.

    Jen

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    1. Sad how easily this one came. They say to write about what you know. . .

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  3. Not only is the refrigerator a magnet, but there are a couple of cupboards I know, that have a magnetic quality, as well. Love this!

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    1. Right Bica. And cookie jars, and cake tins, and. . . . .

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  4. Well done! Great use of the prompt in an unexpected way!

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  5. Ooh, how clever! I'm sure, for people who struggle with eating problems, this is exactly how the fridge must feel.

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  6. Thanks, Freya. And your entry was chock-full of suspense!

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