Five Sentence Fiction
The topic is Whimsical
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Like tiny brown autocratic pillars,
the medicine bottles were still rowed up by the kitchen sink with
his name on them. The empty hospital bed
dominated the living room with its blank whiteness. Five years gone, years that had been long on
schedules and loneliness and exhaustion, and lean of conversation, freedom, and
sleep.
Her life had been squeezed tight,
the very breath of it boiled down to small gasps of a few moments her own -
a chat with a neighbor, the walk to the street to gather the newspaper, or a
pause by the window.
Now she opened all of those
windows, turned up the radio, and began painting the living room bright yellow.
A succinct picture of duty then freedom.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Joanne.
DeleteI loved that. Well done.
ReplyDeleteHi Susie - and thank you for stopping by.
DeleteOh dear, Marty, a picture in five sentences which happens all too often.
ReplyDeleteI like the hopeful ending.
This is very good. The release that comes after being a caretaker is expressed nicely in the last sentence.
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